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And here I am rewriting again. Oh well, with any luck DeeCee will still be the same girl you're falling in love with when I'm done.
I love her too. I confess, I'm one of those sappy writers who loves all their characters. Couldn't bear to be around them for as long as it takes me to write otherwise.
You've nailed the Peter Pan aspect of Orpheus. It's a big part of what makes him so compelling to Eurydice. The problem is she doesn't just have to deal with Peter Pan. She's got the Lost Boys and their entourage, the paparazzi, the groupies... Sometimes all she has is the stuff to remind her that she'll have Orpheus again when he gets home from touring. Sort of.
Plus, Orpheus isn't a blank slate. He's needy and smart. Not necessarily smart in the same very prosaic ways Eurydice is smart, but he knows how to get what he wants. And he wants a lot.
The problem is a fair share of readers don't seem to comprehend the joy he brings, the enormity of his gifts or the complexity that fuel them. That's where I failed with that draft.
Would you like to see the tweaked first chapter? I'm wrestling with the second chapter now. I think it's the section that needs the most work. I hope. LOL
Hugs and thanks,
Jean Marie