It's All Diane's Fault

[jmward14]

Diane Whiteside's, that is.  I'm back in Rewrite Hell.  Oh well, anything for a better book.  (She says through gritted teeth.  LOL)  I wrote about the issue for my bimonthly blog at Fantasy & Enchantment.  Check it out if you want to see the source of my woe.  You know, at times like these, I really wish I could figure out how to make the books write themselves.
Hugs and grins,
Jean Marie
*the blogging delinquent*

Comments

[jmward14.livejournal.com]

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And here I am rewriting again. Oh well, with any luck DeeCee will still be the same girl you're falling in love with when I'm done.
I love her too. I confess, I'm one of those sappy writers who loves all their characters. Couldn't bear to be around them for as long as it takes me to write otherwise.
You've nailed the Peter Pan aspect of Orpheus. It's a big part of what makes him so compelling to Eurydice. The problem is she doesn't just have to deal with Peter Pan. She's got the Lost Boys and their entourage, the paparazzi, the groupies... Sometimes all she has is the stuff to remind her that she'll have Orpheus again when he gets home from touring. Sort of.
Plus, Orpheus isn't a blank slate. He's needy and smart. Not necessarily smart in the same very prosaic ways Eurydice is smart, but he knows how to get what he wants. And he wants a lot.
The problem is a fair share of readers don't seem to comprehend the joy he brings, the enormity of his gifts or the complexity that fuel them. That's where I failed with that draft.
Would you like to see the tweaked first chapter? I'm wrestling with the second chapter now. I think it's the section that needs the most work. I hope. LOL
Hugs and thanks,
Jean Marie

[hutch0.livejournal.com]

Absolutely send me the tweaked first chapter. I'm enjoying the book, but I'm having trouble finding more than a few minutes a day to sit down with it right now. BTW, did you just want an opinion, or do you want the full copy-edit service?
Big Hugs.

[jmward14.livejournal.com]

{{{{hutch0}}}} The doc will follow via your bt account. Just looking for your thoughts, especially on the areas where the characterization storytelling falters. This book is <>so not ready for copy edits. LOL
Hugs and big, big thanks,
Jean Marie